Love Intended #-1, #-2 & #-3

Random First Lines: I couldn't care less,If you died today,It doesn't matter to me,I'm happy either way,I was ten when you wrote... : Poetry » Read

Poem By: EdwardJBradleySr
Poetry

Tags: blessings, bradley, burdens, companion, companionship, destiny, divine inspiration, divine intervention, edwardjbradleysr, edward j bradley sr, edward j. bradley sr., edward j bradley, edward j. bradley, eternal salvation, eternity, god, godly blessings, godly inspiration, godly intent, godly revelation

The reader is asked to read all 3 poems and, if you choose to comment, to please do so with respect to: presentation, rhyme, rhythm, structure, theme and vocabulary.

If you like this posting, even if you have read it and commented on it before, please indicate your approval by casting a vote under the new Booksie rating/vote box. Thank you. I think many people leaving positive comments or who like the posting and do not comment, sometimes, forget to do this.

The theme is identical for all 3 poems. Wording varies slightly. Presentation is distinctly different. Poem #-3 differs from Poem #-2 in that words, which do not, normally, begin with an upper-case letter in a normal sentence have been restored to lower-case. This is in response to comments of those who do not enjoy reading text where each word begins with an upper-case letter. Though my reasons for doing so are explained in my response/s to such comments. In other postings as well.

THEME:

Mainly, it is about how God blesses us with success in the different aspects of our respective lives. In this case, love, companionship and marriage.

The theme and wording presented themselves after many years of thought and being informed by my subconscious mind while in that state between wakefulness and sleep. When many of my ideas and inspiration(s) occur and overtake me. In other words, this is not just another technical writing exercise.

PRESENTATION:

While writing this, I found, I had written 24 lines of 5 syllables each. It occurred to me that this was close to being a Shakespearean style (14 lines of 10 syllables each) sonnet. This 1st draft became "Love Intended #2". Lines 13/25 & 26 and 14/27 & 28 were written to meet the requirements of the Shakespearean style sonnet format. Prior attempts at this form have always eluded me. Want to know what the reader may think. View table of contents...

Submitted: Mar 20, 2007 Reads: 782 Comments: 98 Likes: 39

Love Intended 1

By E. J. T. BRADLEY

For Whom! Among Them! Was I Intended?

Which Of The Women? Would Give Me Her Love?

If We Reached God’s Ear! Could It Be Bended?

Would He Tell Us Dear?: "You Two! You’re To Love!"

Had We Met Before? Or Cheated By Fate?

Were You Ever Mine? Tell Me! When and How?

School, Work, Church Or The Door? Now It’s Too Late?

Is There Time Enough? For Each Other Now?

I’m Told, You’ve Been Near! My Lover And Wife!

Neither Did We See! Nor The Other’s Scent!

Never Did She Appear! In My Lonely Life!

Hiding! Where Was She? Whom God Never Sent!

My Life’s Been Ill Spent! Now Left All Alone.

If, To Me, You Appeared. You Were Not Known!

Love Intended 2

By E. J. T. BRADLEY

For Whom Among Them

Was I Intended?

Which Of The Women

Would Give Me Her Love?

If I Reached God’s Ear

Could It Be Bended!

Would He Tell Me Dear?

It’s "You!", I’m To Love!

Had We Met Before?

On A Double Date?

Were You Ever Mine?

Tell Me! When and How!

School, Church - At The Door?

Working! Out Or Late?

Have We Time Enough?

For Each Other Now?

I’m Told, She’s Been Near!

My Lover And Wife!

Neither Did We See?

Smell Each Other’s Scent?

Never Did She Appear!

In My Lonely Life!

Hiding! Where Was She?

Whom God Never Sent!

If You Did Appear.

Were You Ever Known?

My Life’s Now Ill Spent

And I’m All Alone.

Love Intended 3

By E. J. T. BRADLEY

For whom among them

was I intended?

Which of the women

would give me her love?

If I reached God’s ear,

could it be bended!

Would He tell me dear?

It’s "You!", I’m to love!

Had we met before?

On a double date?

Were you ever mine?

Tell me! When? and How?

School, church - at the door?

Working! Out or late?

Have we time enough

for each other now?

I’m told, she’s been near!

My lover and wife!

Neither did we see?

Smell each other’s scent?

Never did she appear!

In my lonely life!

Hiding! Where was she?

Whom God never sent!

My life’s now ill-spent

and I’m all alone.

If you did appear.

Were you ever known?

Email this story | Print Story | Add to reading list

Comments:

leesah

Mr. B I was just browsing and came across this beautiful piece of work! Wow, in your famous words, Well written!

Posted: Mar 21, 2007

Author Comment:

leesah:

Thank you for the compliment. Glad you liked it. It was a long time "in the works". What/where ever the "works" may be.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

glenda vautrin

great write as usual

Posted: Mar 21, 2007

Author Comment:

glenda:

Thank you so much for the compliment. Glad you liked it.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

matmoo

Sir,

i'm glad this is just not another technical writing poem - although it certainly works very well.
Personally, I prefer your earlier version, Love Intended 2; it appears more like the process of one person's thoughts.

matmoo

Posted: Mar 21, 2007

Author Comment:

matmoo:

Thank you for the compliment. Liked them both. This gives everyone a chance to choose and use the one they like best.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Lord Hoth

I truly enjoyed these writings continue the great work

Posted: Mar 21, 2007

Author Comment:

Lord Hoth:

Thank you for the compliment. Glad you liked them.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Tesseth

Mr Bradley, this was absolutely beautiful! I personally prefer the presentation/structure of #2. The rhyme and rhythm are perfect...as is the vocabulary, of course. I particularly love the theme of this piece...what if we don't know our soulmate when we see them? What then? ------Wonderful piece Mr Bradley!

Posted: Mar 21, 2007

Author Comment:

Tesseth:

Thank you so much for your compliment. From you it is most meaningful. To me. To others as well. I am sure.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

zephyrmail

i vote for #2 :)

Posted: Mar 21, 2007

Author Comment:

zephyrmail:

Thank you. How it came out the 1st time. Amazing! Isn't it?
How the initial rendering seems, always, better than attempts to improve it.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Lucie

Dear Mr Bradley......I can't choose, I love both. I have also gone back on initial writings and then changed things around, and wasn't sure if this was acceptable or not.

Posted: Mar 22, 2007

Author Comment:

Lucie:

Thank you for complimenting both. It's like voting twice. On Election-Day. Those were the days! Now! Gone forever.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Dizzy Lizzy

I'm just a reader, not a writer, but, for what it's worth the first one gave me goosebumps. I don't know whether if I'd seen the second one first it might have too. But, I definitely preferred the first one.

Posted: Mar 23, 2007

Author Comment:

Dizzy Lizzy:

Thank you for the compliment. Goosebumps!?! Hope that means you liked it.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Annie Legend

Hi Ed,
I must say that I found the second one more pleasing. This is probably because it flowed better when I read it. With the first, I found myself reading haltingly, stopping at every explanation mark and question mark and this took me away from the content. With the second, as far as presentation, I feel that it would be better with fewer spaces between the verses as I, and perhaps others, tend to look ahead as I'm reading scanning the next line or two at the same time.Don't know if this is the input you desired or not. Happy experimenting. Great fun. Annie

Posted: Mar 23, 2007

Author Comment:

Annie Legend:

Thank you for the compliment and telling me of your preference.

With respect to formatting. Before posting on Booksie, I, often, compose using WordPerfect, Version 11. When something is copied from WordPerfect and pasted onto the Booksie site, can cause some formatting discrepancies. What is most mysterious is that this does not always occur. For example, I wanted there to be double spacing between verses only, but this did not work and could not be fixed while in Booksie. I'll look into taking different approaches.

Was also wondering what you may have thought of the content and/or message as well.

Thank you for responding.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Saturday Night

Really enjoyed them both Ed. I have to agree with Annie, I like the second presentation much better. Your rhyme and rhythm are great and it flows smoothly with a nice message/question. Very nice! Take care, SN.

Posted: Mar 23, 2007

Author Comment:

Saturday Night:

Thank you for the compliment(s). Glad you liked them. It will, most probably, be quite a while before I ever rise to this level and quality of writing again. But I hope to do so.
Some day!

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

ThePseudoMe

I preferred the first version. I personally found it more meaningful, more thought-provoking. An excellent piece of writing.

Posted: Apr 2, 2007

Author Comment:

ThePseudoMe:

Thank you for the compliment. The preference is running about 45/55 with #2 slightly ahead.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

ddrandall

Hey Ed... for my style number 2 works better for me... but each one sparked a different emotion as well... great writing Ed!... as always... write on my friend!!

Posted: May 19, 2007

Author Comment:

ddrandall:

Thank you for the compliment. Glad you liked them both.

Didn't think each could evoke a different emotional response from the same reader. At the same time of reading them both.

Interesting point. Something for myself to give some thought.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Desert Rat

Ed,

I did, even if fleetingly, read both pieces, as I am about to be on my way again. Powerful, and I tend to agree with one of the previous commenters re powerful punctuation. It gives a staccato effect, and almost feels like an LMG hammering away. Second one is deeper, more relaxed, I think.

very prodigious writer you are, i must say. Will get back to mine as son as I come back off the road.

Desert rat

Posted: Jun 10, 2007

Author Comment:

Desert Rat:

Thank you for the compliment/s. Glad you liked one of 2 versions.

They seem to be about evenly split in terms of which one is preferred by readers. This tells me that, even in poetry, more than 1 rendering will reach a much larger audience. Giving each reader the chance to select their personal favorite/s among multiple postings.

Thank you again.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Awaiting Judgement

Wow...you got a lot of comments and popularity for this one...I personally liked the second one b/c it seemed more organized to me. That and, though it was a worthwhile read, I thought maybe around stanza6...it could read:

Were you ever mine?
Tell me--
When and how?

I mean, that's just a suggestion so...I still liked it, to each their own

Awaiting Judgement

Posted: Jul 7, 2007

Author Comment:

Awaiting Judgement:

Thank you for your complimentary remarks and kind words. Your suggested "rewrite" of stanza 6 is most thoughtful and well written as well. Liked it.

Glad you liked what you did read.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Katrina Leigh

Wow, i really liked both of these poems, but i must say, i like the second one better. these were really beautiful poems and they seem to really express your feelings. keep up the great writing!

Posted: Jul 23, 2007

Author Comment:

Katrina Leigh:

Thank you for your complimentary remarks. They are most appreciated. Glad you liked them both.

This was one for which my source of inspiration was most strong, consistent and to which there was the longest period of personal visitation and attachment. Until it was finally and fully written. That it has been well received makes the experience worth the struggle to find the words to give it the fullest possible and most complete expression.

Thank you again.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Mys Lyke Meeh

Hey there,

This is a very nice, well-written good poem. I wonder if the object of the affection has read this. This poem is really good. I like it very much. The way you wrote it, it's convincing! The emotion is quiet clear and the admiration is definite.

Posted: Sep 28, 2007

Author Comment:

Mys Lyke Meeh:

Thank you for the comment and the compliment. Glad you liked it. Your comment is most thought-provoking as well.

As for "wondering" about the person who is "the object of the affection", this is just one of many crucial questions. Often unanswered. For both.

In other words, the person to whom such question/s should occur should also be the conscious "object of the affection" of the person receiving this silent and inner focus. Bespeaking a spiritual aspect as well. For them both.

In the lives of many worthy persons, the answer for this crucial question seems never to present itself. Even if and when they may know enough to ask it or to whom it may occur. To the person who is adored as well as for themselves. When the asking of it might be most appropriate. In a timely manner. While still young enough to be able to, successfully and happily, act upon and implement the answer to it.

Thank you again.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Paula MacK

Hi, I loved your poem(s) I feel that #1 touched me more but that is also the style that I write more of.
Keep up the great writing

Posted: Sep 28, 2007

Author Comment:

Paula MacK:

Thank you for the comment and the compliment. Glad you liked it.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Kathryn

I liked the presentation of the third. I think if you emphasize everything, than nothing really stands out- it just all screams at you. I think changing the structure to lower case words was much easier to read and adding the variety (but not over-using) of punctuation really made it so much smoother. Having the moments of normalcy really created more drama or tension or suspense when things changed (beit capitalization or punctuation). Take into account that this is all based on my opinion. Sometimes we like the familiar best, and so take all this with a grain of salt and present the poem however you choose best. Poetry shouldn't be democratic. You should dictate how you want use to read it and feel afterward, although I completely understand your want of feedback. Good work and lovely topic.

Posted: Oct 2, 2007

Author Comment:

Kathryn:

Thank you for the comments and the compliment. I agree with you. Poetry is highly individualistic. The choice between different presentations is just "seasoning to taste". Is there a "best" way to "present"? Perhaps! Depends on: the theme and message of the poem, the poet and the reader. To each their own. I guess.

In this case, 3 poems for the price of one. Better value for one's $1. Will this help "sell the poem"? Quantity discounts?!? Where will all of this lead? One may wonder. Just kidding!

Thank you again.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

penniless poet

Liked the poem - liked the second format best

Posted: Oct 3, 2007

Author Comment:

penniless poet:

Thank you for reading, commenting and for choosing. Glad you liked one of them.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Bitter Irony

Lovely work as always. I like the first version best: the effect of the lines seems stronger when they are all put together. I also love the way the last two lines fit together.

Excellent piece!

~Bitter Irony

Posted: Oct 3, 2007

Author Comment:

Bitter Irony:

Thank you for the compliment and for relating, to me, which of them you most prefer. Think I'll leave them all so that each reader may choose from among them that one (or more) which they may prefer.

Thank you again.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

angel777

what a beautiful poem it flows as easily as a river keep up the awesome work and thanks for reading mine as well

Posted: Oct 17, 2007

Author Comment:

angel777:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment. Much appreciated. Glad you liked it.

Your own work is excellent as well.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Killian Black

Nice Work Ed! Enjoyed the rhyme, the vocabulary is excellent as you work always is, and the emotions were played well with the theme in all 3. I would have to say my favorite is #3. It begs the question that if all is said and done, you still don't recognize your love intended, if in fact you had a intended love at all to lose. This one will keep us all musing!

-KB

Posted: Oct 17, 2007

Author Comment:

Killian Black:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment. Much appreciated. Glad you liked it.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

mum55

On reading all three versions i have to say i enjoyed the #2 the best it flowed more easier than the rest Great Work really enjoyed reading them.

Posted: Oct 18, 2007

Author Comment:

mum55:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment. #-2 seems to be slightly more popular than the others. #-3 might be the 2nd most popular. Though just recently added.

If you also gave it a "I Like It" vote: Thank you for that as well. A reader can always revisit a posting to cast a vote.

Thank you again.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Amity Willows

I liked all three, but I most enjoyed the first. To me it was most like a Shakespearian sonnet, while the other to lacked that sense. I also enjoyed the last two as they were very nice, and I think I favor the third over the second. The third was a little easier for me to read then the second, I think because in the second all the words were capitalized and it changed the way the poem looked. I know the words were all capitalized in the first but it didn't seem to affect it as much. All in all they are very wonderful poems, sound in everything: presentation, rhyme, rhythm, structure, theme and vocabulary. Wonderful write, amazing read. :)

(Being new here I am not quite sure what the right way is to rate a poem, but I know that I give the first a ten, the second an eight, and the third a nine.)

:-)

Posted: Nov 2, 2007

Author Comment:

Amity Willows

Thank you for reading and your extensive commentary.

A rating is aasigned by giving a posting a "I Like It" vote. For the entire posting. If you may have forgotten to do this and would like to do so, then you can revisit a posting and cast such a vote.

Thank you again.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

angel777

wonderful piece of work i like the second one best its more powerful and really feels like you are getting your point across overall a beautiful set of pieces

Posted: Nov 15, 2007

Author Comment:

angel777:

Thank you for your most thoughtful comment and compliment. Glad you liked them all.

Can't quite decide myself. The preferences seem to be equally divided among all readers.

If I was going to submit one for competition, #-3 would, most probably, be my choice. But all 3 are about the same.

Thank you for the "I Like It" vote as well.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Flash

I enjoyed the second one best. I have always been told that poetry should be wrote the way you want the reader to feel and understand it. With the three presentations, were you shouting in the first poem, were you questioning in the second, and were you just tired of wondering in the third? Nice job in creating three ways to feel this question. Depending on how you felt the moment you wrote the poem and the way you express it on paper, sometimes dictates the mood for the reader. I loved the way you took me through three different moods for the same work. Nice creative concept.

Posted: Nov 19, 2007

Author Comment:

Flash:

Thank you for reading, commenting, the compliment and "I Like It" vote(if you thought to cast it). Glad you liked them all. In different ways.

Version #1 was intended to fulfill the technical requirements of a Shakespearean style sonnet(14 lines of 10 syllables each).

Version #2 was in the style with which I have written and presented most of my poems.

Version #3 was a modification of Version #2 to accomodate the tastes of some who felt Version #2 could be improved upon(Please read the comments of others).

Thank you agai.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Mind Sight

You are always wonderful with your writting. I enjoyed it very much. Great job. I wish you well and God Bless. Lisa

Posted: Nov 19, 2007

Author Comment:

Mind Sight:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment. If you also gave this posting an "I Like It" vote, Thank you for that as well.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Farah Yameen

There was an Urdu poet who said : There are many poets in this world , but people say Ghalib(thats his name) has an unimitable style. Must say the same for you.

Posted: Nov 25, 2007

Author Comment:

Farah Yameen:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment. If you also cast an "I Like It" vote, thank you for that as well.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

DaveRae

This poem raises an interesting point I feel. People becomming out of touch with their surroundings and each other in the modern day might not see what is right before them.

Posted: Nov 29, 2007

Author Comment:

DaveRae:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment.

There is another point: What if that certain person does not appear to us so that we may see them? When writing this, this thought did not occur to me. It did so later.

This thought, then, suggested to me the idea of the lives lost, needlessly and wrongfully, to a wide variety of destructive practices. Such as: abuse, war, violent crime, legalized induced abortion, unhealthful practices, etc.

Thank you again. Will read your postings.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

ZAIDA

A BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN PIECE. A pleasure to read.
All 3 versions are acceptable.
God Bless
Zaida

Posted: Dec 9, 2007

Author Comment:

ZAIDA:

I have not yet accepted your application as a fan. If I should reject it, then you will be unable to reapply at a later time.

My problem: Your one posting takes the reader to a hyperlink which seeks payment for reading your poetry. Moreover, it also seeks credit-card and other personal information.

In my opinion, this violates the spirit of Booksie because:

1. Booksie is free to you.

2. You have posted none of your own poetry for others to read. Without your trying to charge them.

3. Gives the impression it might be an internet "fishing" expedition for personal financial information. For the possible purpose of committing credit-card fraud.

4. Since others are freely sharing their poetry with you and others, what is to keep you from posting it on your "pay" web-site without ever sharing any of your profits (or the literary credit) with the original poet/writer.

Some things for you to think about. Others may form another opinion.

If you correct these problems(including taking down the hyperlink), I will change my opinion of you and accept your application.

If you do not do as I ask/suggest or remove my comment before doing so, then I will have to reject your application, as a fan of mine, and delete myself as one of your fans. Purely on the basis of ethical considerations.

You are the 1st Booksie member to whom I have ever had to say this sort of thing. Most, if not all of us, would like to see some financial profit from our writing efforts. But, not necessarily, from one another. Or in the manner in which you have put yourself forth. On the Booksie website.

Ed Bradley.

BekahBoo

i like #2, as someone said, it makes it seem like you're thinking it as you read.
im amazed...you've summed up one giant thought into one small poem. i love it :)

Posted: Dec 10, 2007

Author Comment:

BekahBoo:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment. Much appreciated. Most especially if you gave it an "I Like It" vote. Which you can do if you decide to revisit the posting.

Thank you again.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Sprit

Hi Ed...The presentation in no. 2 is clear and concise. It is an easier read to the eye and the rhyming is not "strenuous" as it is easily absorbed from one verse to the next. Definitely “I like it”.

Posted: Dec 11, 2007

Author Comment:

Sprit:

Thank you for reading, commenting, the compliment and rating. Glad you liked it and were able to pick a "favorite".

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

evanslily
(not registered user)

Made me think--always a good thing!

I too like the second version best, though the third ain't bad either.

Not sure about all the shouting capitals in the first version!

Posted: Dec 15, 2007

Author Comment:

evanslily:

Thank you for reading, commenting and stating your preferences. #1 was intended, primarily, to fulfill the requirements of a Shakespearean sonnet. A goal set for myself. By myself. They were, actually, written in the sequence of #2, #1 and #3. #3 was written and presented, in response to constructive criticism, after #1 and #2 were 1st posted.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Awaiting Judgement

I still agree with my original comment--I like the second piece the best.

Awaiting Judgement

Posted: Dec 15, 2007

Author Comment:

Awaiting Judgement:

Thank you for another reading and comment.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

BeckaDawn

Mr. Bradley,

I quite prefer #2. I found it to be the most similar to one's actual thought process, and it was extremely emotional.

My favorite part is:
Would He Tell Me Dear?
It’s "You!", I’m To Love!

Posted: Dec 18, 2007

Author Comment:

BeckaDawn:

Thank you for reading, commenting, telling me your preference and the compliment. Glad you liked it.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Mysteries Revealed

I'm glad you recommended that I read this piece - I definitely enjoyed it. Personally, I like the second version the best. When I read through the first, I honestly had no idea what you were talking about - everything blurred together in my mind. But when I got to the second one, suddenly things suddenly started to come together...each idea is unique in itself but comes together to present one idea (the "universal theme" as you call it).

Thanks so much for commenting on my poems!
-Liv

Posted: Dec 29, 2007

Author Comment:

Mysteries Revealed:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment. Glad you were able to like one of them.

#1 was written just to fulfill the technical writing requirements of what is called a "Shakespearean" style sonnet. After having written #2. #3 was written in response to some of the constructive criticism received about #1 & #2.

Thank you again. Have a Happy 2008!

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

missscarlettanneelizabeth

dear mr bradley,
i read these as you requested and i am most glad that you did, they are very clever and it is a beautiful idea, its an almost sad thought but i liked it immensly and really enjoyed them
scarlett

Posted: Dec 30, 2007

Author Comment:

missscarlettanneelizabeth:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment.

Have a Happy 2008!

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

OScube

It's amazing! It's simple and so expressive.

Posted: Jan 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Oscube:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment. Glad you liked it.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

rickyengland

Ed,
It was a joy to read different presentations of this
superb work. The each have their own life and nuances.
Can I also say that I was unable to post my replies for your kind comments about my poetry..please accept my gratitude.

Posted: Jan 14, 2008

Author Comment:

rickyengland:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment.

You are most welcome as well.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Alvaro Bautista

I LIKED THEM BOTH, THINK HOWEVER THAT PERHAPS YOU LET US A BIT ON THE WAIT LINE BY THE SHORT AND PIERCING- TO-HEART WORDS. HOPE TO READ SOME MORE.

Posted: Jan 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Alvaro Bautista:

Thank you for reading and commenting. Glad you liked them.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

ghost anyway

I like 2 the best. that seems to be the general consensus. Nice form and rhythm, wording.

Posted: Jan 22, 2008

Author Comment:

ghost anyway:

Thank you for reading, commenting and indicating your preference. Most helpful.

Thank you again.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Freespirit4fr

Hi Edward Even though all three contain the same wording I found each gave me a differnet feeling within. The first one felt a bit sad (dont know if this what you intended) The spacing in 2 and three I felt made one read and consume the words in a much slower way thereby appreciating the way they were written. Which one did I like well I cannot decide as I found all 3 very interestingly worded.
Yes God does give us love that we sometimes do not notice and it then flies on by sometimes returning again and again until fullfilled.
Anyway I liked all 3 so will definatel=y rate it if I can find where. Will definately become a Fan of yours I think

Posted: Jan 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Freespirit4fr:

Thank you again. For your kind and complimentary words. For some reason, #3 seems to appeal most to me as well. It was written in response to the constructive criticism that came "rolling in" in response to the posting of #1 & #2. Interesting! To me, at least.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Freespirit4fr

Ok where do I leave a rating. I would give it a highly recommended read. Good luck with all your works.

Posted: Jan 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Freespirit4fr:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment. Ratings are registered in the "I Like It" box.

Thank you again.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

lyrastheory

Hello Ed, I love this poem. I enjoy the first presentation but I'd say the second one is my favorite. Thank you for welcoming me, I can see it's going to be a pleasure reading you!

Posted: Feb 2, 2008

Author Comment:

lyrastheory:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Gendral Sulamani

I liked the poem!-it makes a feeling of loneliness of the question:when is true love felt?or something of that sort.
I love the feeling ur poems give me!
:)

Posted: Feb 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Gendral Sulamani:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment. Glad you liked them. Hopefully, all 3 of them. It pleases me greatly to know my words have been able to reach you. In a warm and positive way.

Thank you again.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Sonnie

I like them all. I think #1 is my favorite.

You are a wonderful poet, I look forward to reading more.

Posted: Feb 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Sonnie:

Thank you for reading, commenting, stating your preference and the compliment. Have read your 1st posting and have given it an "I Like It." vote.

Thank you again!

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Alice Oiseau

Lovely piece of work. My personal favorite is the second one. All of them are beautiful though.

Posted: Mar 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Alice Oiseau:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment.

Glad you liked #2 best. The original effort as it unfolded.

Over time my own feelings of attraction have become strongest for #3.

#1 was written to meet the requirements of a Shakespearean sonnet. Enabling me to accomplish a personal goal which just happened to present itself. Luckily!

Thank you again!

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Ghiradelli Girl

Hey, I thought I'd stop by when I had the chance, and now here I am! I read all three styles, and figured that I liked the third one out of them all. I mean... it kind've spoke out to me more than the other two did. I really liked it a lot!

LOt's of chocolate to you,

Ghiradelli Girl.

Posted: Mar 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Ghiradelli Girl:

Thank you for reading, commenting, the compliment and choosing #3.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

apodiform

Wow, I really liked that. Such an interesting concept said in so few words. I personally liked the flow of the second. The simplicity of it works much better than the first. The punctuation also makes more sense. Great work!

Posted: Mar 29, 2008

Author Comment:

apodiform:

Thank you for reading, commenting, choosing a favorite and the compliment.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

plrojas1612

amazing! i loved the second one the best!

looking forward to more,
plrojas1612

Posted: Apr 3, 2008

Author Comment:

pirojas1612:

Thank you for reading, commenting, the compliment and choosing a favorite. From among the 3 renderings.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

soul

I loved this piece! I always wanted to write like this. confusing, yet, it makes sense completely! it's amazing!

Posted: Apr 12, 2008

Author Comment:

soul:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment. Glad you liked it. Which of the 3 poems did you like the most.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Amata

First I'll say I enjoyed this poem. Now more than ever we need poems about love. There's so much hopelessness and violence out there as there always is in one form or another. Time really makes no difference, the culture simply changes a bit. Wordsworth or Shakespeare had their own version of fears and wars etc. Love is eternal.

That being said. I love to see how others work, the process fascinates me. We don't often see the phases a work goes through as it evolves in the author's mind. I like the third version best because the capital letters throw me a bit, though upon further reading of the second version, it's not so bad. The first is like you're shouting, which is a little jarring.

I've wondered about soul mates, too. Do they exist? And what if two souls decided to NOT get together even though they were "meant to be" just to see what life would be like?

Posted: Apr 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Amata:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the glowing compliment.

Questions:

1. What keeps 2 people, who were "meant to be", from meeting? From recognizing one another? As each other's "soul mate"? When they meet? Embracing and fulfilling their divine destiny?

2. What keeps this from happening? Mindless materialism? Selfishness? Self-absorption? Other pleasure-seeking pursuits? Serving to distract one or both of them from recognizing and embracing the another?

In this case, someone is not thinking about anything or anyone but themselves. Point: The decision was made, unwittingly, long before ever meeting their "soul mate". Should they ever meet at all. After that earlier decision was made. Even if that same decision was made by someone else who is not or was not intended to be one of the "soul mates".

This, too, may serve to explain why so many people are unhappy and depressed. For example, if when someone is supposed to meet their "soul mate" and that person does not appear or is not recognized, then their lives will be plunged into darkness. When, otherwise, they may have been uplifted and lived to experience happiness and elation. Instead. And for no other reason. This, too, would serve to show how every human life can be intertwined with and connected to every other human life.

The answer/s, too, lie/s in the protection, preservation and perpetuation of human life. Because both intended "soul mates" need to be alive. When the intended moment, of their meeting, arrives. This means, as well, the protection and preservation of: truth, peace, justice and Godliness. To preserve human life.

It did not occur to me, at the time of writing it, this posting is closely related to another posting of mine, entitled, "Limerick For Life". Please honor me by reading it.

The point: Many do not, in life, meet their divinely chosen "soul mate" because that person's life ended before they were able to meet. Wrongly, by human intervention, and not in accordance with God's plan, for each, to live to a normal life expectancy. As intended. Serving to explain what Mother Teresa of Calcutta may have meant, in part, when she said, "Abortion poses the greatest single threat to world peace!".

If, also, you thought to give this posting an "I Like It" vote, then, "Thank you!" for that as well.

Thank you again!

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

geminicmy

Yes I enjoyed No 2 as it is similiar in the style I write my poetry, doggerel as I hear its called.

Posted: Apr 24, 2008

Author Comment:

geminicmy:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment. I think.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

tinker

very nice! like it so much!
you really know what ur doing!
you inspire me!

Posted: Apr 27, 2008

Author Comment:

tinker:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Tor Steinsland
(not registered user)

My vote goes to number 2, because that was the easiest to read. That one was most "poem-like" to me, because it made pause at the end of each line insted of reading two lines as one sentence as i found myself doing in the third alternative.

That said, I'm no expert on poems.

Posted: Apr 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Tor Steinsland:

Thank you for reading, commenting and registering your preferred "choice". From among the 3 versions.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Susan Hartline Fouts

You're a great writer, what can I say but that each piece speaks the same message.

Posted: May 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Susan Hartline Fouts:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment. If you thought to give it your "I Like It" vote, then "Thank You!" for that as well.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

V2K

What a thought! I just loved all the three! The difference in them are really marvellous.. hats off to you sir!

Posted: May 8, 2008

Author Comment:

V2K:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

StrictlyVee

First let me say I love this poem, and I gave it a "like" vote. I read all three and my second vote goes to number 2. The flow of this poem was easy for me. It had a musical tune to it.

Oh and by the way every time you write "Happy Trails" I think of Roy Rogers.

Posted: May 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Strictly Vee:

Thank you for reading, commenting, the compliment and the "I Like It" vote. Glad you liked it.

Roy Rogers, though a popular celebrity among young boys, always maintained a consistency of well-meaning and spiritually-based cordiality, which I found refreshing, once again, when older. A kind of atmosphere and spirit, I try to convey to and engender among my own fellow Booksie participants and all others as well. So! I'm still a fan. One could say.

"Happy Trails!" was what I found myself saying to younger people, with whom I worked, who were leaving the work-place for more promising employment opportunities. Much as I did when their age. Knowing that, most probably, I would not see them again or as frequently. Sensing that, at the age at which I had arrived, I was, already, at my own last employment stop or "end of the trail/s".

Thank you! Again!

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

indiefreak

I'm weak in poetry, but I think the second one speaks the loudest. This is interesting, Mr. Bradley.

Posted: May 13, 2008

Author Comment:

indiefreak:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

stickyroehl

Hmmm. I like this poem. It is very well thought out and has a good flow to it (or good meter I should say). The second and third ones are my favorite. Number one seems to be a bit to enthusiastic with all the question and exclamation marks, but I like how it doesn't have so many spaces between the lines.

Posted: May 24, 2008

Author Comment:

stickyroehl:

Thank you for reading, commenting, choosing your favorites and the compliment. Glad you liked them.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Phil Neale 1952

Great stuff, and to write the same ideas in three distinct modes is impressive when it doesn't detract from the message.

Just looked at the number of your fans........says it all doesn't it?

Phil

Will read more at lunchtime. It's 8.40am UK time and I really should get down to work.

Posted: May 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Phil Neale 1952:

Thank you for reading, your most thoughtful comments and the compliment.

Ah! Yes! "Work!" The most loathsome of all the unutterable 4-letter words. Ending in the letter "k".

Thank you again.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Elain Weston

i really liked the second one. it flowed easier and for some reason when my eyes jumped down to the next line i felt likeit was getting faster sort of like he was begging harder or something. but only number two made me feel that way. you are a very good writer and i enjoy reading your work.

Posted: Jun 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Elain Weston:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment. On the whole, #2 is more enjoyable than #1, which was just an academic exercise for me. #3 has become my favorite, for now. Just don't seem to know, "Why?".

It is something like a prayerful plea. I guess. Hard to say. Is it poetic or analytical commentary. Or a form of confused and pained wishful thinking. Not sure myself.

One idea, now, occurring to me is it may be that of one's own destiny going unmet/unfulfilled. Either totally or in part. In that person's lifetime.

There may be more here that meets the mind's eye.

Also see this as a "tandem" piece to my posting of "Limerick For Life". Though not, at the time, when writing either of them.

Thank you again.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Buford13

I focused on poem #2 in this comment:
Very interesting. Because of who I am I automatically look at if from a theological standpoint and in that way I like it very much but there could be flaws. Never the less that is not what you asked for. I like the rhythm very much. The other technical parts are fantastic but I tend to find rhythm to be an especially difficult, and in this case well executed, part of any poem.

Please do let me know what you think of my work, especially "Your Eyes Aglow: and "I kissed her goodnight." After seeing your work I would love to get any advice you have to offer.

Posted: Jun 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Buford13:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment. Glad you were able to choose one as your own personal favorite.

Not sure what the theological flaws might be. Although, until now, it did not occur to me that 1 or more of them might be seen as having a prayerful quality.

Check out my response to "joy milton" (above) where, I think, I explain my views on both rhyme and rhythm. Rhythm is, essentially, the same or nearly the same number of syllables within each line within a verse or within corresponding lines between verses. It is not always the same, in all cases. Some variation/s is/are possible. Without disrupting the rhythm. Reading a poem aloud is, often, the best way to tell.

Thank you again.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Da Lee La

wE REAd, therefore we conquer or am I askance? I enjoyed both versions....... Is it the less said the better? No not when it comes to one's writing - as this is the core of the indivudual. It may only reflect a few snipits although it does reveal the inner most aspects of the person. You are a deep feeling, thinking writer... adjectival excuses i have not for my comments.

Mine is:

Happy Days, lest the rest take the best and we are left bereft, so make your peace, take your bow, you know how. (Oops did i sound poetice for a moment?)

The rest - being those that concede and acknowledge your literary accomplishments - as do I, take our hats off at this achievement. Very well done, you have my vote.

So much can be said about relationships, soul mates, but no one ever understand just exactly how you feel it in your soul.

You write with your soul.

Posted: Jun 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Da Lee La:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Da Lee La

ooooooPs i meant all three versions........Happy Days

Posted: Jun 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Da Lee La:

Thank you! Again!

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

julistar

the voices in poem 1 and 2 are completely different with 1 sounding a lil cocky as if to say God was supposed to set down a woman before him. In 2 the effect of the change in punctuation and editing of some words is that the "I" seemed more anxious about the "is there someone out there for me" question. however i thought the poem in general ends too abruptly without developing the emotion or resolving the problem

For this reason, leave it up to the reader and change the last lines in 2 to the last lines in 3:
"My life’s now ill-spent

and I’m all alone.

If you did appear.

Were you ever known?"

I'm not a big fan of leaving things up to fate, generally and there seemed to be no reasons given or implied to empathize with this guy.

Posted: Jun 2, 2008

Author Comment:

julistar:

Thank you for reading and commenting.

These poems could describe anyone. A common or universal human emotional problem/s which may beset an enormous number of individuals. During their individual lifetimes. From one generation to the next.

Sometimes there is not a happy ending. As in this case.

Many, at the end, will die with unresolved "issues".

Emotion/s expressed can be seen as an admixture of anger, isolation, disappointment, frustration, despair, sorrow, loss, lost opportunit(y/ies), living one's life in a fog which may obscure or distort one's view of one's own circumstances, cohorts and/or surroundings Any or all of which could be the result of other misfortunes, negative experiences, emotions, circumstances, victimization by another(or others) and/or one's own deficient character/personality traits. All of these poetic renderings reflect the imperfection and unfulfilled yearnings, some noble and others not, of all humanity, individual human beings and the human condition. On both an individual basis and in aggregate. Over the span of human history.

As far as the ending seeming, to you, too abrupt: When the words, comprising these poems, stop coming, to me, I stop writing. Then I engage in as many iterations of proof-reading and re-writing as the finished product requires. This is just how I work. By writing no more (or less) than what the guiding inspiration instructs and guides.

As said in a few earlier comments:

I, now, consider this to be "in tandem" and "of essence" with my earlier posting entitled "Limerick For Life". With the idea that, perhaps, one's soulmate was sent, by God, but did not survive the pregnancy which would have, otherwise, preserved their life. As the result of an induced and/or surgical abortion. So that they, by living, may appear, at the intended moment, to their intended soul mate. In accordance with God's plan. For them both.

Reason/s to empathize.

Empathy is what is felt by someone. For another. In recognition of experiencing or having experienced , at the same moment or in the past, the same or a similar set of feelings. Of the other person. Another way of saying the same thing: "The ability to, more deeply, share in the experience of another by placing one's self in the position, circumstances and/or situation of the other person." For whom the empathy is felt.

If someone cannot empathize with another, then, they can't. It's as simple at that. If what is described, in these poems, cannot be found in someone's own background or experience/s, then, I say to them, "Count your blessings! How blessed you have been!".

Thank you! Again!

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Bradtruscott

Dear Mr Bradley......I cannot choose between them, I love both! You're a great writer, each piece that you write talks to me in ways I didn't think possible.... thank you

~Brad

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Bradtruscott:

Thank you for reading and commenting.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Mellyface

I really enjoyed reading this.
It had good rhymes, and good rythm, but it still flowed and made sense.
I do think the third version is best, just because with all the capitals my mind wants to read each word separately and it loses my focus a little, compared to the third one anyway.
One thing I liked about the first one was all the punctuation; it was a fun different technique that added more, would you say 'whimsy'? to the poem. However, the only drawback to this is that it breaks up the sentences a little and can be slightly harder to follow.
Overall, though, it's very good and well written!
Sounds like something they would have in one of my literature books at school- very professional.
You have a talent for this, keep it up!

:]

Posted: Jun 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Mellyface:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment/s.

Apparently, much can be said about each of the 3 versions. Your comments and discussion are most thoughtful. Whatever else can be said, I think, can be found in all of the other reader comments and my reply(ies) to them.

At this point, #3 has become my favorite of the 3 versions posted thus far. Version #4, which has not yet been written, will have to be most impressive, if I am going to take the time to write and, then, post it.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Laurel

I personally like the second poem better.
Beautifully written, keep it up!

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Laurel:

Thank you for reading, commenting and your most gracious compliment. If you thought to give it an "I Like It" vote, then "Thank You!". For that as well.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

storyofmylife

wow, really good,
i especially liked #2

:]

keep it up

Posted: Jun 26, 2008

Author Comment:

storyofmylife:

Thank you for reading, commenting, the compliment and making your choice.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

tinker

very nice! all three of them!! love them!

Posted: Jun 29, 2008

Author Comment:

tinker:

Thank you for reading, commenting and your most kind compliment.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Annah

Poem #1 is what I would call broadway poetry.You could picture it as a play.Poem #2 is perfect in wording and format and in ryme.Poem #3 is good but with the word changes even though it was miner changes detracted from the heart and soul of the original poem.Great work

Annah D. McFarland

Posted: Jul 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Annah:

Thank you for reading, commenting, the compliment and making your choice. Thank you for the "I Like It" vote as well.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Zia Jaycee

Hey! I loved it! I really want to check the "I like it" boxy thingy but i don't know how...please help me! I really liked how you made it a Shakesperian sonnet...could you please tell me how to do that with writing u know like the meter and stuff? I tried it once but I got it wrong...so please help! I loved the theme and everything of this though Great job as always! :) -zia

Posted: Jul 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Zia Jaycee:

Thank you for reading, your most thougtful comments and the compliment.

The "I Like It" box appears at the bottom of the text, of each posting, just before the "Comments" section. To register an "I Like It" vote, a reader needs only to place and "click" their cursor in the lower rectangular section of the "I Like It" box. Hope this helps.

My posting entitled: "Limerick For Life" might interest you as well.

Again! Thank you!

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

xthexpoetxxx

i like'd the first one best. altho my option dosent really matter, but either way i loved it, it has meaning behind it not knowing where to look, or weather or not you seen, met or, walked right past the person meant for you... many of us ask ourselves that but no one knows, only god dose..
i loved it.. && i would love for you to comment mine

Posted: Jul 15, 2008

Author Comment:

xthexpoetxxx:

Thank you for reading, commenting, choosing and the compliments. Will read and rate yours.

If you have not done so already, please read and rate my postings entitled:

1. "Excitement Inspired....",

2. "Our Grampa Ed",

3. "Limerick For Life",

4. "Self Love",

5. "Here To Stay",

6. "POEMS" &

7. "A Poem".

Again! Thank you!

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

MyBrokenDarling

Well I read this piece as you asked me and I have to say I love it, all three of them actually but the one that I liked the most was the first one, it just makes you wanna read it again... Congratulations again and I hope u'll keep on giving us great poems like this one... And I'm off to the next one.

Posted: Jul 19, 2008

Author Comment:

MyBrokenDarling:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Goldenglow

you never ceased to a mze me, Edward!!
Loved these!

Posted: Jul 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Goldenglow:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Anakura

Like you have asked me i have gone through your poems and i have to say that this is the best so far. I love how you have used different structure and techniques to your advantage while changing odd lines to add to the effect. Where did you come up with the idea? Truly inspiring, and keep writing!!!

Posted: Jul 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Anakura:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment.

Every poem is, 1st, suggested by a theme. Then, the structure and presentation seems to take on it's own form. As it is being written. Can't explain it further.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

SomeoneCrazy

Very Good!!

Posted: Aug 14, 2008

Author Comment:

SomeoneCrazy:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Gillian

I have become addicted to your work,
hopefully you could give me some advice on mines please.
It is my dream one day to write for newspapers and magazines, I would love my poems to be seen worldwide so maybe one day it will be.
I love the way you use the words in your poems
I like them all. I simply cannot pick the best way.

Posted: Aug 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Gillian:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment.

My best advice about or insights into writing poetry can be found in the other "comments" for this posting. Hope they help you. Try to relax. It makes the entire process much easier and, I think, enhances the quality of one's output. Best of luck.

If you have not done so already, please read and rate some of my other postings entitled:

1. "Excitement Inspired....."

2. "Our Grampa Ed",

3. "Limerick For Life",

4. "Self Love",

5. "POEMS" &

6. "Here To Stay".

Again! Thank you!

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

DiscoveredDream

Amazing. You have quite the talent.

-DD

Posted: Aug 18, 2008

Author Comment:

DiscoveredDream:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment. Glad you liked it.

Will get to work reading your postings as well.

This may be, personally, my most favorite set of poems. Of course, the theme/s may have something to do with it. As well as because: my subconscious mind presented most of the thoughts and ideas to me before sitting down to write and record them. Between Midnight and 6:00 A.M.. My most productive time-period. At times.

The loss of sleep is burdensome. At least, I'm retired and can sleep during the day. When most other people have to work. When employed, solved many work-related problems and dilemmas the same way. It is unusual and a tiring experience. In the life of anyone. Can't explain it further. In a way which would satisfy the requirements of hard and true scientific inquiry and/or research.

I give all credit to Almighty God. I have been, merely, His instrument. In answer to my faith and prayers. By way of sending His Holy Spirit to visit me, when, He knows, I'll be most receptive to His promptings. It is a blessing and, at the same time, a burden. He can take it from me whenever He chooses and tranfer the assignment to another, to whom, He thinks and knows, will do a better job. I believe, suspect and guess.

It is the sort of experience which, seldom, takes place 2 days in a row and if, not acted upon, for a given poem, may not present itself again. Have lost many poems as a result. By not getting up to write and, instead, going back to sleep.

In this case; the theme/s, thoughts and ideas interrupted my sleep for several nights. Before I would get up to write them down.

Hope my response has not "spooked you out" too much.

Again! Thank you!

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Anna Therese

I love your experimentation here. Fascinating! As I read through the first version it did have a very Shakespearian, olde worlde feel. Despite the onerous use of explanation marks and question marks it read well - that surprised me - I felt like I was reading from an old book of poetry or sonnets and it pleased me. But breaking it up further slowed it down, to the last more modern version.(I think?) By the time I had read all versions I had truly grasped the search for love expressed. An admirable writing indeed.

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Anna Therese:

Thank you for reading, your most thoughtful & insightful comments and the warm and glowing compliment/s. Glad you enjoyed reading them.

It is one of my own most favorite efforts as it originates, most fully, from within myself, spent a lot of productive time in exploring the theme and in pursuit of the end product. Feel, also, it connects well with "Limerick For Life".

If you have not done so already, please read and rate some of my other postings entitled:

1. "Excitement Inspired....",

2. "Our Grampa Ed",

3. "Self Love",

4. "Limerick For Life",

5. "POEMS",

6. "Here To Stay" &

7. "Katie Anne.

Again! Thank you!

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Manyfacets

Hello Ed, The professionalism shown in your work is impressive. #2 generated a feeling of warmth which I
like. Poetry hasn't been one of my primary interests
and therefore I cannot articulate anything of value regarding the poem's depth or meaning. Although the genre for placement of my work is labeled poetry I would have to argue that it is simply "Rhyming" and not poetry. Poetry in my view gives a sense of negativity that irks the psyche. My usual habit is to
avoid it. However, keeping an open mind, there is a willingness to break a habit considered to be bad. You market yourself very well and the presentation is second to none...Kind regards

Posted: Sep 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Manyfacets:

Thank you for reading, your most thoughtful comments and most generous compliment/s.

Poetry can be positive, uplifting and need not be negative, as is some of it.

Again! Thank you!

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

sinonskin

I feel the second poem is most powerful, but in all you've definitely maintained that demanding sense of curiosity.

Wonderful work!

Posted: Sep 15, 2008

Author Comment:

sinonskin:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the "I Like It" vote.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

comettail

That's sweet Ed,
I gave you "i like it" vote
cheers

Posted: Sep 15, 2008

Author Comment:

comettail:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

JaneMeurig

I love how (in 2 and 3) the punctuation makes it feel like a person's thoughts going round, making sharp turns and sudden exclamations. But, miraculously, it also flows due to the rythym and rhyme. I like the way #2 looks, though, with the capitalization making it feel like every word is more important than if it were in lower case.

And, of course, the content is wonderfully thought-provoking. Thank you for the wonderful poem.
-Jane

Posted: Sep 23, 2008

Author Comment:

JaneMeurig:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the glowing compliment.

For me, it's a toss-up. Between #2 & #3.

Again! Thank you!

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

mave

As a person who recently got married (9/20) I found these poems interesting. I like 2 and 3. I could see the questions better and they did not have a "creepy I'm going out of my mind" feeling.

The man that I married and I have a unique story on how we fell in love. This mades me think of everything that we share.

I do like all three:)

Posted: Sep 27, 2008

Author Comment:

mave:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment. Glad you had a preference for 2 of them. Much appreciated.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

audw

I loved your poem! I liked the structure of the first one best! It must haved came from the heart because I can tell of such. Just me saying, it seems like I have hear this poem before. Otherwise, it is very good.

Posted: Sep 29, 2008

Author Comment:

audw:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment. Glad you liked one of them.

Thank you for becoming a fan.

If you have read this poem elsewhere and can tell me, I would appreciate knowing. These poems all originate with me and would like to know if someone may be presenting my work as their own.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

zeel

Hi, I actually like LI1. Its more of my style and I think that I am able to feel it better. Am not able to get that continuity flow well with the line breaks from LI2 and LI3.

Posted: Oct 8, 2008

Author Comment:

zeel:

Thank you for reading, commenting, choosing and the compliment.

Everyone seems to have their own favorite. Goes to the issue of how a different presentation can appeal. To the reader.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Nona

Ed,

I did as you asked and read all three in order. The third one was most moving to me. The quiet wondering and resignation of age. The capitalization and punctuation in #1 were distracting to me. To me it seemed that #3 was the most "distilled". Fine, smooth bourbon.

Nona

Posted: Oct 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Nona:

Thank you for reading, commenting, making a choice and the compliment. Most grateful for your glowing remarks.

#3 has become my favorite as well.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

kristyraven

Cool :)

Posted: Nov 8, 2008

Author Comment:

kristyraven:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment. Much appreciated.

Will read and vote for yours.

Again! Thank you!

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Tammii

whoa! this isn't my usual type of style to read, but i really enjoyed reading it. The way it was written just somehow seemed to draw me in. I thought the emotion in it was wonderful and i must say i liked 'Love Intended 2' more so than the other.

Posted: Nov 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Tammii:

Thank you for reading, commenting, the compliment and "I Like It" vote. Much appreciated.

It surprised me, how so much variation can be placed. In both meaning and feeling. Within what is, essentially, the same poem.

If you have not done so already, please read and rate some of my other postings entitled:

1. "Epitaph-5 (Wealth!)",

2. "Excitement Inspired.....",

3. "Our Grampa Ed",

4. "Limerick For Life",

5. "Self Love",

6. "Here To Stay",

7. "POEMS" &

8. "Katie Anne".

Again! Thank you!

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

DraconianKnight12

Hi, erm i dnt want to get too specific, but your poem was really good, it was written brilliantly and i loved each one, you are a truly excellent poet

Posted: Nov 24, 2008

Author Comment:

DraconianKnight12:

Thank you for reading, commenting and the compliment. Much appreciated. Will read and vote for some of your own postings as well.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

bry

awesome

Posted: Dec 11, 2008

Author Comment:

bry:

Thank you for reading, commenting, the compliment and "I Like It" vote. Most appreciated.

Will be certain to read and vote for your postings as well.

Again! Thank you!

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

AngelaKumpolt

Wonderful!

Posted: Dec 20, 2008

Author Comment:

AngelaKumpolt:

Thank you for reading, commenting, the compliment and "I Like It" vote. Most appreciated.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Anna Elizabeth Rose

Beautiful. So well written, it really drew me in.

Posted: Dec 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Anna Elizabeth Rose:

Thank you for reading, your most thoughtful and tender comment, the compliment and "I Like It" vote. Most appreciated.

Have read and voted for your postings. At times, without commenting.

Again! Thank you!

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Ceidon

good stuff. i think i like the first or second one the best. probably the second. yet another "i like it" from me :)

Posted: Dec 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Ceidon:

Thank you for reading, commenting, choosing a favorite and the "I Like It" vote. Most appreciated.

Merry Christmas and a Happy & Successful 2009.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Chiqui

WOW! great writing here, first attempt for me a definate, beautifull, deep and touching, expressieve and says it all.
Happy trials Edward
Chiqui

Posted: Dec 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Chiqui:

Thank you for reading, commenting, the compliment and "I Like It" vote. Most appreciated.

Thank you for becoming a fan.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

	Add to Reading List
	Become a fan
	Email this story
	Read/Write Reviews
	Print Story

Other writing by EdwardJBradleySr Legislation: Domestic Care-Givers Epitaphs 6 & 7 (Dark Night Of The Soul!) Here To Stay POEMS Friends In Close Harmony More..