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A Different Kind of Cinderella.

Short Story By: Caycee
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“My converse replace the glass slippers. My jeans and t-shirt, replace the long white dress. I may not go to fancy restaurants, McDonalds is fine with me. I guess you can say I’m your converse wearing, dress hating, McDonalds eating, Cinderella. <3”
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Submitted: Oct 27, 2008    Reads: 463    Comments: 28    Likes: 9   


She had straight, long, black hair. She was invisible to the rest of the world. She had a name, but nobody knew it.

Keth had been watching her for an awfully long time. He wondered about her. Why was she so quiet and mysterious? What was attracting him to such a person? He never knew what he saw in her, but it was something that made his stomach tie up in knots.

He wanted deeply to talk to her. Keth wasnt sure how to approach such a person.

One day, he had dropped his pen near her desk. The girl noticed, and bent over and picked it up, and even gave him a warm smile.

Later that day, he asked the girl her name,

"My name is Talia." She said, with her beautiful smile.

"I'm Keth." He introduced himself.

"I know who you are." Talia said.

"How?" Keth questioned.

"Lets just say, I've heard about you." She said walking away.

Again, she left Keth wondering. Where has she heard about him? How long has she noticed him?

The next day, Keth met up with Talia again.

"I have been watching you a long time.." Keth confessed.

"I have been watching you too." She smiled as she put her books in her locker.

Ever since then, Keth has felt completely comfortable around her. For a month, they remained very close friends, and one day, Keth got the courage,

"Hey Talia." He said happily as he saw her walk down his block.

"Hey Keth." She replied.

"I was wondering...could we maybe try and go out?" He questioned, his face turnging red. Talia then got down to the floor and kneeled on her knees in the middle of the sidewalk,

"Its about time!" She yelled, raising her hands up. Keth laughed,

"I know, I know.." He said, with an ear to ear grin.

"But I need to warn you..I'm not your ordainary girlfriend. My T-shirt and jeans can replace the cheer leading outfits tbhe girls where. My converse replace those high heels. I may not have the beauty any guys want, but I got beauty inside. I dont go on those stupid diets, I will always and forever eat Mcdonalds..." She rambled, laughing at every few words.

"Well then I guess your my converse wearing, dress hating, McDonalds eating, Cinderella." Keth smiled, and kissed her.

He finally relized what he liked about her all along. Not her akward stage on the outside, but her natural beauty on the inside. With your beauty on the inside, thats all you need. <3


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Comments:

hehehe i like it! =D it gets you wondering if people notice you, but you don't notice that they're. it could be creepy in a way---but hey...it's kinda sweet.

+Hecate+

Posted: Oct 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!

AAAAWWWWWW i loved it this could turn into an amazing book you know. I like how it was a different cinderella not the usual high heels big white dress thing. I liked how keth like her for who she was on the inside and out it's hard to find guys like that. So bravo i loved it and can't wait to read more!:)

Posted: Oct 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! That means alot that you said that. :]

awww so sweet omg i luv it!!!

Posted: Oct 31, 2008

Author Comment:

awwh! Thanks!

That was so AMAZINGLY sweet! I love Keth, and your summary is awesome...I liked it!!! Great job Caycee!

Posted: Nov 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! :D

that was like the most adorable thing ever =D

Posted: Nov 17, 2008

Author Comment:

=DD

Thanks!! =D

Hey it cut my comment off I had more than that grrrrr!!!!

I love the last three paragraphs

Posted: Nov 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Hey, and its okay! :DDD

hha, thanks!

yay!!!
that was sooo cute

Posted: Nov 17, 2008

Author Comment:

haha thanks!!

Yay, a happy ending! I needed one of those, thanks a lot!

Posted: Nov 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha, no problem. :]

I LOVED it!! The summary was PERFECT! I really really liked it. You know, if you wanted, you could turn this into a novel....You'd have to let me know if you did!! It's really cute :)
~Lauren

Posted: Nov 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! =D

vewy sweet! awsomely sweet! yet i have proposition for you.... would be ever so kind enough to check out my stuff!! ive been off booksie for a while and there are so many new people!!!

oh and do read the first chapter of my book chrysanthe if you like it continue reading, if not feel free to tell me your not intrested. Id love to have your opinion on my work!

Posted: Nov 18, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks! and sure, i will read some of your stuff. :}

sorry comeputer problems!

Posted: Nov 18, 2008

Author Comment:

haha its okay.

that was really good. and suuper sweet. i wish i had a guy like that!

Posted: Nov 18, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks, and me too!

I LOVE THIS STORY! It has a really good title and body. The guy was sooo sweet!

Posted: Nov 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! =DD

Abby
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the summary of the past two weeks of my life... thanks for writing this, let alone putting it on the web..

Posted: Nov 18, 2008

Author Comment:

i know the feeling, and your welcome. :]

That is rly good. I love that.

Posted: Nov 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! =]

I liked this very much. It was cute and well written.

Posted: Nov 18, 2008

Author Comment:

ty! :]

LOVED it!! Cheers to all us girls that don't latch on to the latest trend, and know how to think for ourselves!! Great job! LOVE the characters!

~:~Misery

Posted: Nov 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!! CHEERS! =DD

You are invited to my brother's online booksie party! It's his "early" party. Copy and paste this to anyone else you want to invite!

Posted: Nov 19, 2008

i like it it kinda stalker status...jk...but it cute

Posted: Nov 19, 2008

Author Comment:

haha, thanks

omg i luved it :)

Posted: Nov 20, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks! =D

ILGC
(not registered user)

Wow that was beutiful. What a story. Great job

Posted: Nov 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! =D

wow thats really nice... i really like that... its so beautiful and shows people the real meaning of beauty. :)
well done!
xox

Posted: Nov 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much! =DD

it's nice! the title is catchy but the story is not enough! i need mooooore~! =))

Posted: Nov 21, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks! =D

It has a certain amount of charm. It would be excellent though, if you turned it into a novel. I would buy it. I like it.

Posted: Nov 24, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks so much! =D

this is rlllllly good, i liked it, and ya u should turn it in to a novel :) i would buy it too.

Posted: Nov 24, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks! =D

wow!!! i love it,,, (i know how all the people can say that over and over again). Make another one! haha.

Posted: Nov 26, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks! and haha. :D

That's so good! Loved it!!

Posted: Nov 29, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks!

AWWWW! I really lyk it! its so cute and beautiful.

Posted: Nov 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! :]



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